First mail

My mail:

Hi teacher! How are you?

I am Marc Rodríguez and I am fifteen years old.

This year is my second year with you and I am very happy because you are a nice teacher.

In a futur I don't know what I will do, I don't have it clear.

I have decided to do the scientist bachillerat because I think that I will have more opportunities in a futur than if I do other thing.

I love the sports and I could  to do "INEF" but I think it would be cool to do "Turism" because here in Catalonia there are a lot of opportunities in this sector.

This year I have worked in a hotel in Roses and I have liked it a lot the experience because the contact with the clients, mostly foreigners, it has been very good.

  

                                                                                                     See you soon,

                                                                                                                 Marc Rodríguez.

Correct mail:

Hi teacher! How are you?
I am Marc Rodríguez and I am fifteen years old.

This year is my second year with you and I am very happy because you are a nice teacher.

In a future I don't know what I will do, I don't have it clear.

I have decided to do the scientific bachillerat because I think that I will have more opportunities in a futur than if I do other things.

I love the sports and I could to do "INEF" but I think it would be cool to do "Tourism" because here in Catalonia there are a lot of opportunities in this sector.

This year I have worked in a hotel in Roses and I liked the experience a lot because the contact with the clients, mostly foreigners, has been very good.

  

                                                                                                        See you soon,

                                                                                                                    Marc Rodríguez.